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87分
原文内容
Many people think reading books are very important in modern society, but some people believe it is no longer necessary because technology develop very fast. In my opinion, reading books still play a important role in our daily life, and it cannot be replaced by phones or computers easily.
First of all, books provide us with deep knowledge which is not easy to find on the internet. When people search information online, they often only read short articles and quickly forget it. However, when we read a book, we need to spend long time to understand the ideas, so the knowledge stay in our mind longer. For example, if a student read history book carefully, he will understand the background better than just watching a short video.
Secondly, reading books can improve people’s thinking ability. Books usually describe problems in a complex way, and readers must think by themselves. This process help readers develop logic thinking and imagination. If children read more books, they will become more creative and smarter in the future. Many parents does not realize this and let their children play games all day, which is not good for their growth.
Finally, reading books can make people feel relaxed. After a busy day, sitting quietly and read a book can reduce stress and makes people feel peaceful. Compared with using phone, reading books is more healthy for eyes and mind.
In conclusion, although technology change our life in many ways, reading books are still necessary. People should spend more time on books, not only because it give knowledge, but also because it help us become better person.
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综合评分
86.6
内容29.9
词汇19.1
逻辑18.8
语法18.7
总体评价
总的来说,你的文章写得很好。你清晰地表达了你的观点,提供了有力的论据,使用了适当的词汇,并且语法准确。你可以尝试使用更多的高级词汇和短语来提高你的词汇丰富度。继续努力,你的写作技巧将会进一步提高。
分项评价
内容评价
你对写作任务的回应非常清晰。你明确地表达了你对阅读书籍的重要性的观点,并且提供了几个有力的理由来支持你的观点,如"books provide us with deep knowledge which is not easy to find on the internet"和"reading books can improve people’s thinking ability"。
词汇评价
你的词汇丰富度适中。你使用了一些描述阅读书籍的词汇,如"deep knowledge", "complex way", "logic thinking"等。但是,你可以尝试使用更多的高级词汇和短语来提高你的词汇丰富度。
逻辑评价
你的文章连贯性和衔接性都做得很好。你的观点清晰,论据有力,每一段都有明确的主题句,然后用详细的例子和解释来支持这个主题句。你的结论也很好地总结了你的观点。
语法评价
你的语法多样性和准确性都很好。你使用了各种句型,如复合句和并列句,使你的文章更有深度和复杂性。你的语法错误很少,这使得你的文章易于理解。
高级表达建议
建议简单句和复合句交叉使用增加句式多样性。
句式建议
可以利用基本的句子形式来表达自己的见解。
语法错误 (22处，11个句子)
句子 1
原句：
Many people think reading books are very important in modern society, but some people believe it is no longer necessary because technology develop very fast.
修改后：
Many people think reading books is very important in modern society, but some people believe it is no longer necessary because technology develops very fast.
错误说明：
- 1. 疑似主谓不一致，把【are】修正为【is】;
- 2. 疑似主谓不一致，把【develop】修正为【develops】;
句子 2
原句：
In my opinion, reading books still play a important role in our daily life, and it cannot be replaced by phones or computers easily.
修改后：
In my opinion, reading books still plays an important role in our daily life, and it cannot be replaced by phones or computers easily.
错误说明：
- 1. 疑似主谓不一致，把【play】修正为【plays】;
- 2. 疑似冠词 限定词错误，把【a】修正为【an】;
句子 3
原句：
When people search information online, they often only read short articles and quickly forget it.
修改后：
When people search for information online, they often only read short articles and quickly forget them.
错误说明：
- 1. 疑似介词错误，在【information】前插入【for】;
- 2. 疑似代词使用不当，把【it】修正为【them】;
句子 4
原句：
However, when we read a book, we need to spend long time to understand the ideas, so the knowledge stay in our mind longer.
修改后：
However, when we read a book, we need to spend a long time to understand the ideas, so the knowledge stays in our mind longer.
错误说明：
- 1. 疑似冠词 限定词错误，在【long】前插入【a】;
- 2. 疑似主谓不一致，把【stay】修正为【stays】;
句子 5
原句：
For example, if a student read history book carefully, he will understand the background better than just watching a short video.
修改后：
For example, if a student reads a history book carefully, he will understand the background better than just watching a short video.
错误说明：
- 1. 疑似时态错误，把【read】修正为【reads】;
- 2. 疑似冠词 限定词错误，在【history】前插入【a】;
句子 6
原句：
This process help readers develop logic thinking and imagination.
修改后：
This process helps readers develop logical thinking and imagination.
错误说明：
- 1. 疑似主谓不一致，把【help】修正为【helps】;
- 2. 疑似选词不当，把【logic】修正为【logical】;
句子 7
原句：
Many parents does not realize this and let their children play games all day, which is not good for their growth.
修改后：
Many parents do not realize this and let their children play games all day, which is not good for their growth.
错误说明：
- 1. 疑似主谓不一致，把【does】修正为【do】;
句子 8
原句：
After a busy day, sitting quietly and read a book can reduce stress and makes people feel peaceful.
修改后：
After a busy day, sitting quietly and reading a book can reduce stress and make people feel peaceful.
错误说明：
- 1. 疑似非谓语使用不当，把【read】修正为【reading】;
- 2. 疑似主谓不一致，把【makes】修正为【make】;
句子 9
原句：
Compared with using phone, reading books is more healthy for eyes and mind.
修改后：
Compared with using a phone, reading books is healthier for eyes and mind.
错误说明：
- 1. 疑似冠词 限定词错误，在【phone】前插入【a】;
- 2. 疑似形容词使用不当，把【more healthy】修正为【healthier】;
句子 10
原句：
In conclusion, although technology change our life in many ways, reading books are still necessary.
修改后：
In conclusion, although technology changes our life in many ways, reading books is still necessary.
错误说明：
- 1. 疑似主谓不一致，把【change】修正为【changes】;
- 2. 疑似主谓不一致，把【are】修正为【is】;
句子 11
原句：
People should spend more time on books, not only because it give knowledge, but also because it help us become better person.
修改后：
People should spend more time on books, not only because it gives knowledge, but also because it helps us become better persons.
错误说明：
- 1. 疑似主谓不一致，把【give】修正为【gives】;
- 2. 疑似主谓不一致，把【help】修正为【helps】;
- 3. 疑似名词单复数错误，把【person】修正为【persons】;
修正后的文本
Many people think reading books is very important in modern society, but some people believe it is no longer necessary because technology develops very fast. In my opinion, reading books still plays an important role in our daily life, and it cannot be replaced by phones or computers easily. First of all, books provide us with deep knowledge which is not easy to find on the internet. When people search for information online, they often only read short articles and quickly forget them. However, when we read a book, we need to spend a long time to understand the ideas, so the knowledge stays in our mind longer. For example, if a student reads a history book carefully, he will understand the background better than just watching a short video. Secondly, reading books can improve people's thinking ability. Books usually describe problems in a complex way, and readers must think by themselves. This process helps readers develop logical thinking and imagination. If children read more books, they will become more creative and smarter in the future. Many parents do not realize this and let their children play games all day, which is not good for their growth. Finally, reading books can make people feel relaxed. After a busy day, sitting quietly and reading a book can reduce stress and make people feel peaceful. Compared with using a phone, reading books is healthier for eyes and mind. In conclusion, although technology changes our life in many ways, reading books is still necessary. People should spend more time on books, not only because it gives knowledge, but also because it helps us become better persons.